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Hi!!!!!!!!!! Althea！！！๐Ÿ’žI'm your friend Aria. Here is my comment for your part 2 Your blog is so fantastic๐Ÿ’˜ and colorful๐Ÿ’ซ 


A) Good Job!!!  

I think your blog is very clear and organized. Your idea is unique and close to our life by having a connection with the luxuries, which helps us to understand it better. From it, I can see your definition of the American Dream, which is the trap of consumption directly.


B)Parts that weren't successful

 For step 6, your topic is connected with the brand-Chanel, but I did not a specific connection between them. Besides, I did not see your quotations from the book. I did not get your meaning in some of your sentences. You may need to be more logical.


C) parts to improve

 I think that adding more quotations is better for you to explain and to improve your ideas. Before you update, you can read more times for better organization of logic.

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